Please give revision of
-connection between thesis
-connection between paragraphs
-check if it is using PEEl in every paragraph( P: point, opinionE: evidence explain your opinion E: explanation, example L: link to next point or back to the main question)
-check grammar mistakes
-make the sentence better, more professional
-check the essay structure
-better, and cleaner words use of first sentence
-For the first sentence, please use what+what it does( example: Firstly, the aesthetic effect that Gucci chose was outstanding and characteristic, (what is) which improved Gucci’s uniqueness in customer’s impression again. (what it does)
please make this article more clear and professional. I really need an A in this final essay, thanks a lot.
